VARIATION 1:
Once upon a timethere was a girl.
and every day
this girl gave her lunch
to a homeless man
on the corner.
until one day
the girl
starved to death.
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Variation 2 (haiku style)
Once upon a time
there was a girl. and daily
this girl gave her lunch
to a homeless man
on the corner. until once
the girl was not there
the girl physically
the girl disappeared.
the girl starved to death.
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So why did i post this? It just popped in my head and i want to create something from it but i don't want to forget it so i blogged it. it's not quite a poem, not quite a story, not even good. but...i wanted to post it. so yeah. hope it's acceptable.
I just took a risk. i'm shaky again. i don't know why. it happens when i write something that i think will be worthwhile, or is worthwhile.
uhm excuse me. I'd like something taken out of this post. "not even good." I find that offensive to you for you, because I will not tolerate people insulting you, even if it's you doing it!
ReplyDelete:] <3 the story. I like variation 1 first. it shocked me. i think i like it because it starts off like a children's story, and then suddenly turns solemn, like a traumatic childhood event.
;] keep it up, i want to see you expressingyourself artistically more!